Open-Ended Sad Love Song Inspired By Okudzhava’s (Окуджава) “Он наконец вернулся в дом.”
At first, I started translating the original song. But as I kept translating, many things didn’t translate and I had to re-write entire lines and later entire verses. The original song is also older in song structure and didn’t have a traditional chorus or a bridge so I added a bridge. Now, it’s only similar to the original in vague ideas so instead of calling it a translation and a cover song, I say it’s inspired by the original song.
This is one of my English translations of songs by Bulat Okudzhava that I proudly collect for you. It also happens to be a song with rich metaphors and meaningful lyrics.
Sad Love Songs’ lyrics:
VERSE 1
Every night she slept dreaming of me
And in my dreams, she was all I could see
We met on the stars (same note) as we closed our eyes
Swirling around each other in midnight skies
VERSE 2
We painted sunsets lavender
While sharing dreams in love whispers.
Until sunrise broke the spell – time to part
Waking apart missing half of our hearts
VERSE 3
After years I came to her door
To give her the flowers my heart grew for her
But I tripped on my words and couldn’t confess
How for years I dreamed of her caress
VERSE 4
She was dying to melt in my arms
But hesitated to reach for my palms
We stood silently and I began to leave
Back to live in the dreams we weave
BRIDGE:
Dreams kept love alive while decades flew by
I met her later – her eyes still with pain of our last goodbye
We melted into a clutching embrace –
But this vivid dream ended with only silent walls to face.
Author’s Notes On This Song
When I was done with the lyrics, I thought they were great. I still think so. But my vocal performance in this song as well as the musical arrangement can and should be better. In the future, I plan to re-write the musical arrangement for this song and re-do the vocals, after which I plan to re-release this song. That will happen in late 2022 or 2023. I’ll update this page when that happens.
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